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(#1) September 20, 2008 5:19:46 AM
Corez
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Dilapidated

http://fc07.deviantart.com/fs37/f/2008/264/2/a/Dilapidated_by_Corez.jpg

http://corez.deviantart.com/art/Dilapidated-98450176

Read artist comments; C/C is appreciated. :]

EDIT: Took some suggestions from the below poster, looks better now imo.

Previously edited by Corez (September 20, 2008 6:40:22 AM)

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(#2) September 20, 2008 5:44:51 AM
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Re: Dilapidated

Interesting, and the typo is not bad too smile

Maybe you could reposition the elements into a better composition, right now it's to constricted for a minimalist piece like this, needs more white space.

Remember that while less is more, it's more difficult in that each element has to be placed effectively for the piece to work smile


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(#3) September 20, 2008 6:21:54 AM
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Re: Dilapidated

Thanks for c/c, I already fixed the empty space thing. I made the canvas bigger, and also sharpened the (blue) focal a little more since it looked a little blurry in comparison to the rest of the piece:

http://2.wimg.co.uk/r7eiys.png

Edit: okay, not THAT much of a difference compared to the other (empty space-wise).

Previously edited by Corez (September 20, 2008 6:23:39 AM)

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(#4) September 21, 2008 5:51:04 AM
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Re: Dilapidated

Cleand and nice wink
I like how thoose red lines give life to the piece

http://i64.photobucket.com/albums/h186/amanis_photos/Goodbye.png

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(#5) September 21, 2008 2:51:43 PM
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Re: Dilapidated

interesting work.i like it...
somehow its very empty and clear, much of white...
but somehow fully of creativity smile

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(#6) September 22, 2008 8:22:42 PM
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Re: Dilapidated

Thanks guys. big_smile

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(#7) September 23, 2008 6:18:41 AM
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Re: Dilapidated

v2 is much better

http://cl3tus.deviantart.com

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(#8) September 23, 2008 7:38:11 AM
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Re: Dilapidated

like it but i think its to empty

http://uploadsonline.com/images/7ambtwspe4oifniuoypa.png

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(#9) September 25, 2008 12:43:23 PM
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Re: Dilapidated

Yeah, I need to keep on experimenting with the use of too much empty space.. :S

But thanks. :]

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